Main Tumhen Pana Chahta Hoon

The below is a result of an assignment in which me with my colleague need to write some sher on the title "Main Tumhen Pana Chahta Hoon" and this is what i submitted. I dont know what about the others... main tumhen pana chahta hoon! dard bhare geet bhulana chahta hoon, kheja mein phool khilana chahta hoon, saaz-e-dil sunana chahta hoon, main tumhen pana chahta hoon! Dilon k raftaar badhana chahta hoon, Khamosh zindagi bhagana chahta hoon, paani mein aag lagana chahta hoon, main tumhen pana chahta hoon! khushi ke nagmein gungunana chahta hoon, batil ehsas zaheerana chahta hoon, mustian lutana chahta hoon, main tumhen pana chahta hoon! dabe josh ka ehsaas karana chahta hoon, aasmaan ko jhukana chahta hoon, samandar mein gote lagana chahta hoon, main tumhen pana chahta hoon! parvat ko dhool banana chahta hoon, tu roothe to ashq bahana chahta hoon, har tarike se tumhein manana chahta hoon, main tumhen pana chahta hoon! tere aankhon mein apna naqsh chahta hoon, tere sapno mein apna ekhtyaar chahta hoon, tere saanson apni khushboo ka ehsaas chahta hoon, main tumhen pana chahta hoon! Har zarre pe tera naam khudwana chahta hoon, Badalon se apne chahat ki gawahi chahta hoon, har haal mein tumhein rijhana chahta hoon, main tumhen pana chahta hoon! Deewano mein apna shumar chahta hoon, Had-e-Dewangi k paar chahta hoon, apne kaseede padhwana chahta hoon, main tumhen pana chahta hoon! teri raho se kaante hatana chahta hoon, teri thokar mein lana zamana chahta hoon, tere har gum ko apnana chahta hoon, main tumhen pana chahta hoon!